How do you make the jump from your story’s outer world narrative to the inner thoughts of your character?
Are you scratching your head? Well done. That’s the secret.
The little girl held her breath in protest. Harry scratched his head and drew a hand across his receding hairline. She’s turning blue, he thought. What the heck is she doing?
Draw attention to the inner self by using the outer physical self. Outer gesture – inner thought. Try it.